Down a little bit from all the other clouds the darkstorm-cloud had been working on his creation ready for the stalk that he loved. The stalk flew in to get his delivery, tired and some of his feathers fell off. Gus had wiped off his feathers, the bird then backed away from Gus, scared. Gus then performed his magic and made the tiny goat come to life. But the goat ran into the stalk's stomach. Gus then saw him look up to the other cloud in the sky with a puppy having fun, he was extremely jealous. Peck turned around and looked at Gus scared and Gus handed the package and Peck flew away with the rough goat. Would this goat be too much to handle for Peck?.
Question: what do you think i could have made better?
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